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    dots Submission Name: My dear friend...part one.dots
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    Author: LiChan
    ASL Info:    18/f/in my reality
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 9/6/12
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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    dotsMy dear friend...part one.dots
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    Driving in the car, its that time of year
    I'm thinking of you, and when you were near
    I'm hoping to see the face of my best friend.
    Coming from the terminal, smiling again
    I know the times are hard on him, he is going through a lot
    I know he isn't awfully far, but he isn't near enough.
    I want to see him this fourth of July.
    And give him the hug he needs, look him in the eye
    And tell him that I have missed my dear friend...




    Submitted on 2009-06-27 22:43:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the title it really grabed on to me and got my attention and the poem is very well writing. Alot of emotions went in to this writing. I can tell, I realy like the writers style and seems to fit in great.

    thanks

    totojane
    | Posted on 2009-08-24 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]


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