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    dots Submission Name: Cold Chilldots
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    Author: Diablo Tapitio
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 85/111/62
    Words: 255
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsCold Chilldots
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    I feel the chill of every raindrop that hits my flesh,
    I spin around in so many circles I can never clean this mess,
    so on my path of dirt, and all of your bullshit,
    I try my best to dim my wits, close my eyes, another hit.

    Another drink that pulls me in, shields my soul from all my sins,
    as another day drifts away,
    I lose any clever thing to say, as my pain is washed away,
    I remember the days that I used to play.

    its funny how things can change,
    one moment I am your knight, the next I am too strange.
    baby I love you still, let me count the ways,
    But its so hard to count when you live in a haze.

    So I numb myself with coke, so I cant feel the needle in my vien,
    another way to wash away, all of your memories,
    I made some bad choices, now your ghost is all I see.

    I see your face in every passing cloud,
    when I close my eyes, your voice I hear so loud
    I still feel the sand in my hair, and the sea breeze on my skin
    I made my own bed, so your heart I shall never win,

    I can only say that I am haunted by your memories,
    and I am blinded by what I should be.
    reality is a monster, at least for me,
    dont want to be a slave to your memories





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      damn. i really liked this i could totally feel all your emotions. bad choices cant be fixed but most definatley can be learned from. the past will always haunt only if you continue to live in it...start over, its hard but it is worth it. they are just memories they cant hurt you unless you let them. nice work though. it grabbed my attention from the very first line
    *joez*
    | Posted on 2009-06-29 00:00:00 | by joezwells | [ Reply to This ]


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