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    dots Submission Name: Narcotic Love dots
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    Author: Kyrith
    Elite Ratio:    0.93 - 0/0/2
    Words: 206
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsNarcotic Love dots
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    On the edge of time,
    I wait for you,
    Silent,
    Patient,
    Sentient.
    Taken from me,
    In the spring of our love.
    You stood in the light,
    But now in the dark,
    I am your watcher,
    Your friend,
    Your lover.
    The shadows laid bare before me now,
    I see your end.
    There is no greater loss than that of hope,
    Except for that of our love.
    I have done my part,
    Now it is yours,
    Renounce this shade and return to me,
    Or pass ever onward into the depths of this darkening realm,
    I will follow you,
    Of that be assured.
    If you pass I am lost here,
    This world is not my own,
    I do not belong to this place,
    I live this lie alone,
    Without you it stands bare before me,
    Empty, lifeless,
    A reflection of us,
    The atrocities of that which we renounce laid out,
    Humanity.
    Without you I see this world for what it truly is,
    A rotting corpse,
    We are the maggots on the carcass of this dead earth,
    Our love is my drug,
    The more I take of you, the less there is of me,
    I know its killing me,
    But at least it numbs the pain of this lie.




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