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    dots Submission Name: The path leading to nowhere dots
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    Author: AbsolutelyLost
    ASL Info:    27/M/India
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 54/41/33
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 811
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsThe path leading to nowhere dots
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    In the mob there is a lad,
    Lost and sober in his thought.
    A will to fight, a flame to survive,
    In the wilder of this life.

    Came to the world with a smile,
    Laughed and cried in impeccable bliss.
    Toyed with books never in place,
    Smiling in the arms of his fairy.

    Learned to walk fumbling and mumbling,
    Being ironically comic in the crowd.
    Rosy cheeks pulled with tender hands,
    Pampered yet punished to be mould.

    Years passed and he grew up,
    Wishing for roses in disguise.
    Is there mist in his eyes,
    Of the dreams in which he cried.

    Twisted but weaved is his story,
    Rusted but chiming is his glory.
    From immense despair to a perfect bliss,
    Wish him luck for walking path leading to nowhere.




    Submitted on 2009-06-28 05:32:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Whoa. The meaning of this poem kinda got me. I love the last line- The tone of finality, of a pointless adventure, a goal to which there is nothing to get.

    The one thing that I didnt get was "mould"
    Was this a misspelling?

    Otherwise, good job! Keep it up.

    Safire
    | Posted on 2009-07-19 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
      Came to the world with a smile,
    Laughed and cried in impeccable bliss.
    Toyed with books never in place,
    Smiling in the arms of his fairy.

    Learned to walk fumbling and mumbling,
    Being ironically comic in the crowd.
    Rosy cheeks pulled with tender hands,
    Pampered yet punished to be mould.

    DAM this is WOW... i love it you kept me going and i didn't wanted it to end, i was sad to see it end. Actually read it again lol. This is great I am unsure what else to say

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2009-07-05 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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