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    dots Submission Name: Love Has Abandoned Medots
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    Author: Doublefeather
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 71/61/33
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsLove Has Abandoned Medots
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    Why is love like a battlefeld that never ends?
    Where did it stop?
    Where did it begin?
    Where did I go wrong?
    Did I give up too early?
    Did I play the wrong song?
    What did I do?
    Was I a love sick fool?
    Stand for love and you'll get kicked down,
    Swim in it and you'll drown,
    So please tell me, where did I go wrong?
    Was I too ugly?
    My words too long?
    Just tell me!
    Please, this is all I need, for love has abandoned me.




    Submitted on 2009-06-28 22:29:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this piece is very honest. your not the only one that feels this way. i totally liked this because so many people can relate to it.. just be patient it will find you. its very true that love is blind. it could be standing right next to you and you dont even know it...just hang in there and keep writing. i loved this!! nice work
    *joez*
    | Posted on 2009-06-29 00:00:00 | by joezwells | [ Reply to This ]


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