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    dots Submission Name: the hermit witchdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ohio State
    Elite Ratio:    6.06 - 174/189/127
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 45
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    dotsthe hermit witchdots
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    She had one hanging tooth
    crookedly valiant against her raw gums
    and it shook her smile on its axis
    a gaping filth-hole to oblivion's gate

    her veins throbbed under pale skin
    like knot-holed roots under the ash tree
    her limbs laid sagging at her sides
    as sinister shadow-casters
    rotting the soil and letting the worms thrive

    her sockets were charred coals
    gray and spent
    having long forgotten the faces
    of the dead and dying

    and when she stares at you
    she stares through you
    she listens to the air you displace
    and grimaces at the disturbance

    her apathy keeps the pace of fools
    and her mind fled with all emotion
    now she wanders, blind
    muttering foul curses to the wind
    its movement is nature's taunt
    to the stale witch of the ages




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