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The words in my head


Author: stormkrow
ASL Info:    24/ male / Montello Wi
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The words in my head



The words in my head
Are driving,
controlling my every thought and action

The music swirling in my mind is
joining with and contorting
to the words

The to beautiful things

words like the sea
and the music like fire

The haunting melody of my life
goes on down the twisted path
of fear , the sweet
agony , and
betrayal of love

it only makes my actions more worthwhile
more meaningful

and again I find myself listening to the haunting melody and watching for the time when the words and music don't quite rhyme

in the end all that matters is the fact that I am all alone in the so called life that I live

the life that Is hurtling down the twisted path
of agony the sweet betrayal of love and the fear that I will end up alone .






Submitted on 2009-06-29 01:57:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I love your first paragraph talking about how the words control you.
And when you say 'all that matters is that im alone in this so called life' really reminded me of myself when i went through a rough patch But
But you shouldn't live your life in fear of things but u should be enjoying it
You should keep writing, even if no one else reads them ill read them but im sure other people will read them.
| Posted on 2009-06-29 00:00:00 | by Whatamidoing | [ Reply to This ]


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