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    dots Submission Name: The words in my head dots
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    Author: stormkrow
    ASL Info:    24/ male / Montello Wi
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 51/52/39
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe words in my head dots
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    The words in my head
    Are driving,
    controlling my every thought and action

    The music swirling in my mind is
    joining with and contorting
    to the words

    The to beautiful things

    words like the sea
    and the music like fire

    The haunting melody of my life
    goes on down the twisted path
    of fear , the sweet
    agony , and
    betrayal of love

    it only makes my actions more worthwhile
    more meaningful

    and again I find myself listening to the haunting melody and watching for the time when the words and music don't quite rhyme

    in the end all that matters is the fact that I am all alone in the so called life that I live

    the life that Is hurtling down the twisted path
    of agony the sweet betrayal of love and the fear that I will end up alone .






    Submitted on 2009-06-29 01:57:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love your first paragraph talking about how the words control you.
    And when you say 'all that matters is that im alone in this so called life' really reminded me of myself when i went through a rough patch But
    But you shouldn't live your life in fear of things but u should be enjoying it
    You should keep writing, even if no one else reads them ill read them but im sure other people will read them.
    | Posted on 2009-06-29 00:00:00 | by Whatamidoing | [ Reply to This ]


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