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    dots Submission Name: my good samaritandots

    Author: gwenn sundala
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 76/70/51
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       i wanted to write a song for my fiance, a special song, but i couldn't get past the first two lines. so i just started writing, i let myslef go, and this is what i got. hope you enjoy.

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    dotsmy good samaritandots

    i wish i were a poet who could use flowery words, or a musician who could make the notes dance across the page. a beautiful song or lyric, a present of glorious adoration, i wish i had to give to you.

    but i'm afraid it's just plain me. i don't know of fancy things, nor can i write the way that expresses how i feel. so here i pour out my heart, in the hopes that you will understand...

    how can i thank you for saving my life? life before you was cold, emty, and meaningless...i tried to do what's right, i tried to trust god, but my past had shot me in the heart and left me dying on the road.

    then you, my good samaritan, picked me up and carried me. you tended to my wounds by listening to me and comforting me. you held my hand, you held me close when i cried.

    i wish i could give you the gift of my purity, but bad relationships and abuse have left me damaged. despite these facts, you stood by my side and carried me through. god sent me a kindred spirit to help me see that i am not alone, and for that, i love you with all that i am...

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      interesting to read this on Good Friday---

    sometimes the first couple lines come and the rest will just suddenly pour out...and be better than we thought...this is a good "letting go"---

    i hope you are safe tonight...i am also in illinois, in carbondale..and we are expecting a round of severe storms again...damn won't this ever stop?

    | Posted on 2011-04-22 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow this is really good even if you say you were unable to get past the first two lines. It feels as if I am reading into your soul. And what you write is your heart speaking the words of your soul. Very nice! I'm sure your love will be pleased to read such a sweet piece!

    | Posted on 2009-06-30 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]

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