Utterly ashamed and alone by Paradox

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Submission Name: Utterly ashamed and alone dots

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Author:	Paradox
ASL Info:	25/m/Earthbound
Elite Ratio:	4.04 - 647/352/64
Words:	120

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	79
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	774

Description:
Abandon all hope!

Utterly ashamed and alone dots

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I found beauty in a convenience store
Hidden in a corner, passed out on a shelf
Totally subdued by volatile substances
Exposing flesh
I instantly recognized the barcode
Tattooed on the back of her neck
The price was right
So I tried to put her in my shopping cart
There was not enough room for her
And she just wouldn’t wake up
Maybe screaming would have made her move
But the store policy implied absolute silence
I started poking her and pulling on her hair
The surveillance cameras caught me
And a salesman arrived, to inform me
That no tempering with the goods was allowed
I abandoned her and quickly left the store
Utterly ashamed and alone

Submitted on 2009-06-29 15:25:02 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i found this intriguing and original, almost comic in a way, yet sad for obvious reasons. to buy love from a shelf, or even something approaching it, cannot be done... as of yet, until those personal robot manufacturers in japan start upping the ante... but i digress.

it seems many can't read between the lines here...
| Posted on 2009-07-07 00:00:00 | by meoww | [ Reply to This ]
  i agree.
this poem although has it strong points loses me at soem point.
i liked it but i wish i could understand it more.
like you said my 2 cents,
rachel:)
| Posted on 2009-07-05 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]
  What on earth were you shopping for?

Good write, I love the way you described the whole expiriance, and I love the line about the barcode.

=] ~Carrie
| Posted on 2009-07-05 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
  mmm interesting.. umm I'm not sure what you are implying here. You've left me wondering what exactly you are writing about... mmm everything fits at first it didn't seem like it was going to but I get it all. Just not aware of the underline meaning

Jackz
| Posted on 2009-07-05 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]

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