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    dots Submission Name: do the samedots
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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    20
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 339/412/258
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsdo the samedots
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    whats my mind coming to these days
    i'd rather spend them alone
    then thinking about your face
    and when the day comes to an end
    i dont take comfort in arms
    im alone and its not a sin.
    i find myself worrying more about
    a clean house then how the war is
    and i cant make time to call your mother
    i think shes forgotten about me anyway.
    i find simple pleasure in looking at the ocean
    and now i have new friends that are just mine
    &the smell of smoke doesnt get me down
    it makes me cough instead.
    i aint nothing but a drifter now
    but i live in this apartment by the sea.
    i stopped holding on
    so please i hope you'll do the same.




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