Description: Just something.
Nobody has really got from this what I intended when I wrote it.
Any opinions of what it means would be appreciated.
Any ideas on how to make it more n tune with the reader without being too obvious even more so
So, you want my understanding of what u wrote huh? It changed around the 3rd stanza, so I will start from the beginning and work my way down.
In the beginning, it seems to me that its about wishing for good, but forever seeing the possibility of bad. The 2nd stanza is my favorite. Thinking of just how great “good times” can be. And then comes my favorite line: “To a heaven attached to life”. I cant really explain…why I love that line that much…clearly anyway…moving along…all the hoping and yearning does have a price, and one of them is the time it wastes or the time that escapes. All the time planning and all the while missing out…never able to actually move on those plans because well…you’ve got to spend that time planning as well. What puzzles me is the embrace…it makes me think, that you are passing this time with someone you love, and then comes the line, “thoughts grasp at memories that never were”….all of me (as opposed to part of me) wants to think that this means that you and the person you love together…reminisce on what could’ve been…those memories that could have been had, if planning hadn’t sent all that time away. And then comes that last line…which makes me think I didn’t get it at all….how far off am I?