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    dots Submission Name: Unknown Watersdots
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    Author: vLame
    ASL Info:    21/m/lbc
    Elite Ratio:    1.61 - 15/18/50
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 63
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 890



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    dotsUnknown Watersdots
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    Your lips have their own personality

    I want to believe you're perfect for me

    That's a religion I can trust and agree

    Don't you see, you're beautiful

    As beautiful as my heart can see

    I'm not a strange guy that is all pervy

    Writing this about you is making me happy

    I don't want to lose you

    Because I never had you

    Like a treasure in a storybook

    Gone before it was ever took

    I cry because we're floating in Unknown Waters

    Fortunately, you're as lost at sea as me

    Eliza, Liz, Beth, take over the hull for me?

    Steer clear of anything that can hurt we

    As we do our best to make us work

    And be happy for all eternity




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