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    dots Submission Name: Devourer Of Nightmaresdots
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    Author: Kierstin
    ASL Info:    14/M/Swansea
    Elite Ratio:    4.96 - 2/1/1
    Words: 764
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
    Total Views: 62
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 4528



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       This is one of my stories from Quizilla. About a creature known as a Baku.


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    For our all our lives it is safe to say yes. We've all had a nightmare or two. But, have you ever wished you could rid yourself of one? Well there is sucha creature that will save you from you're torment. Devourer Of Nightmares, Creaters Of Dreams, Master Of Minds, The Baku. A supernatural being used to get rid of nightmares or create them.
    My job is to tell you of the life of a particular Baku known as Aiden The Baku. She had beautiful, dark blue eyes that seemed to hold an ancient power behind them. The way she gazed into you're eyes sometimes they would flicker to a grayer shade and almost catlike. Only few have seen the eyes of the Spirit within. Aiden's eyes seemed to capture anyone the way they seemed to glow in the moon light, the way they looked to ancient for her beautiful, young face. But if you are to meet the Baku I should give you a description cause she is quite....'Different'. She has ghostly white skin and in the shadows it give her a ghostly glow making the red marks on her shoulder glow bloord red. Her eyes glowed in when the light hit them. They we're filled with no emotion, uncaring yet so beautiful it left men and women breathless the way she walked slowly by in the shop.
    She always carried a suitcase with her filled with secrets and mysteries of her life and nightmares she's consumed from past bodies. She also weilded a cane. It was long it came up to her waist. It had a orb in the handle that glowed when she 'entered' someone. It's also had a weird attachment to it that could open up, but it never did we always wondered what it was for.
    Everyone loved the Baku, but she seemed to love no one or care. Like she held no emotions. Her eyes always showed she was deep in thought. But, she never talked to me just smiled when she say me.

    But, today was different as I gazed upon her from the counter her skin casting it's ghostly glow, her white hair falling to her shoulders and glowing also. Her anceint eyes peered outside deep in thought as usual.
    "Xander?" she whispered a hint of question in her voice.
    "Yes?" I answered completely fasinated by her soft, beautiful voice. I wasn't paying attention to the fact she was staring at me with her eyes.
    "Why are you smiling like that?" I suddenly realized it wasn't a fantasy and shook my head.
    "Sorry. Daydreaming."
    "About what? You know I can't peer into daydreams" She smiled a bit, but it didn't reach her eyes and felt my heart give a little squeeze.
    "A...friend." I finally answered she couldn't guess it was her.
    "You make me feel....'funny' Xander." She smiled then turned back to her window humming softly. My hopes seemed to shoot up like a rocket. Aiden liking me? I shook my head Couldn't be. I just smiled and closed my eyes listening to her hum. The bells at the shop's door rang andI relunctly opened my eyes. Aiden had stopped humming and was picking up her cane and suitcase. A young boy walked in glancing around,
    "Does Aiden The Baku live here?" He asked fiddling with his gray, torn shirt. He had bright blue eyes and blond hair. Aiden smiled sweetly again it didn't reach her eyes and she held her hand out.
    "Come Here Dear One." her ancient voice whispered. the boy stepped to her cautiously and took her hand, she picked him up and placed him on her lep.
    "What's troubling you, Dear?" she asked wonder in her eyes. She didn't care about the boy only his nightmare. I cleaned glasses behind the counter as he uttered these next words.
    "I see myself dissapearing..." I glanced up at Aiden and she returned the stare with a nod. the boy was cursed to become a Baku soon.
    "I'm sorry, I can't help you with that dream....Another Baku will come to help you"
    The little boy looked like he was going to cry, he bent his head forward his hair covering his eyes,
    "I'm going to become a Baku aren't I?" Aiden nodded slowly letting him off her lap. The boy walked out slowly and I frowned shaking my head. Aiden sighed like she was depressed and I looked over at her,
    "What Is it?"
    "I didn't get a nightmare." I smiled as she pouted her head in her crossed arms.




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      I see a large amount of possibilitys with this, many different ways for it to evolve and shift...Im not one for showing any sort of major emotion or congratulating people, but well done.
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