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    Author: Queen_of_spades
    ASL Info:    21/F/Nocturne
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 95/166/107
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 940
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    model this
    model that
    you're nothing
    but a puppet to them
    take off your clothes
    and get comfortable
    because you can't stop
    until the hour is up

    you think you've heard it all
    then you don't get to choose
    look into the lights
    they're waiting to shoot

    some of these days
    the poses are better
    than others
    but look into my eyes
    and the truth is uncovered

    you're nothing but a marionette
    your strings are tied up tight
    you're not allowed to breathe
    you're not allowed to fight

    Just strike a pose
    and turn up your nose
    pretend you don't give a damn
    they'll do your hair
    and paint your face
    you're selling yourself
    but feign some grace

    or go ahead and stand your ground
    tell them 'no' and watch them flee
    There are plenty of models in the world
    more mediocre than you could ever be

    model this
    model that
    you're nothing
    but a puppet to them
    so take off your clothes
    and get comfortable
    because you can't stop
    until the hour is up




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      you either say no...i am not going to be someone you mold into what you want...i am going to be me...what i want to be...

    i see that here in the allegory of the model...a person who won't stay if you just want eye candy or a trophy on your arm...someone who will compromise to your every whim...nope, not me-=-i won't get addicted to you...i won't leave myself behind for the hour, or the day, or the week or any of the time i am with you..
    find another model you can sculpt or paint or photograph to suit you...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-06-03 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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