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    dots Submission Name: I love my boyfriend but he has a high IQdots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.82 - 647/1087/622
    Words: 319
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotsI love my boyfriend but he has a high IQdots
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    The equations of our faces don't match up, no one thinks so
    And our expressions can be tense but in the mirrors, we look so fine so I don't mind
    And I asked him to tell me all the things my mother would rather me not know
    And he said those are things he might tell me when we're old
    For now he said, I'll touch your breasts and we can do the things that make people know we're young
    So I stuck out my tongue at him

    I love my boyfriend, he is quite clever, he has his life together for the most part
    He has that high IQ and if I am rubber I guess he is glue
    And maybe he does some things he shouldn't do, like breaking windows to enter through but he is no so bad
    Not so bad at all and if he is, its not really his fault

    I told him to teach me how to be free and he said, "I don't see any walls around you"
    And I asked him to show me how to fly and he said, "well you already know how to fall don't you?"
    and finally I told him I needed to know the secrets of love and he said
    "You will see won't you?"
    And he is more brilliant than most people think, they just don't know what I do

    I love my boyfriend but he has this high IQ and sometimes he talks and the words taste like salt and they feel an awful lot like rocks
    but he doesn't mean it
    Its not his fault

    I love my boyfriend, he is quite clever and he has it together for the most part
    I think he is not so bad, not so bad at all, if he is, it isn't really his fault









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    ||| Comments |||
      I love the lyrical dance.
    I'm not sure how else to describe it :]

    Your form has improved quite a bit, but that's not to say that it wasn't amazing before.
    I love the way your words can paint a picture of the way you feel, while keeping the things you want hidden in plain sight for no one to understand but you.

    I miss you !!!!!!!! -.-
    <3

    ~Rose
    | Posted on 2009-07-02 00:00:00 | by Queen_of_spades | [ Reply to This ]


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