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    dots Submission Name: Just Metdots
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    Author: vLame
    ASL Info:    21/m/lbc
    Elite Ratio:    1.61 - 15/18/50
    Words: 233
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsJust Metdots
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    i couldn't possibly like you anymore

    why did we ever do what we did for?

    maybe we both wanted more

    were we both tired of being items at the singles store?

    it wasn't wrong because it felt so right

    i've never felt as good as i did on that night

    you held me just right

    you made it all go away overnight

    maybe we just weren't right

    but why then did we hold each other oh so tight?

    and show each other it was gonna be all alright

    i can't tell you i deserve you for forever and a day

    i just have to let you want me in that way

    i think we still have so much to say

    i just don't want us to break each other's hearts someday

    we have to be careful, the way we play

    if forever holding each other we wanna stay

    im sorry its hard getting used to each other, girl

    we're just new to each other's world

    but we have to open up if we want true feelings to be unfurled

    im sorry we jumped so far ahead

    although i don't regret

    we acted and moved on things we shouldn't have said

    well, not as of yet

    because we just met




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