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    dots Submission Name: Chaotic Daysdots
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    Author: girly101
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 292/310/149
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       Thought id try somthing new. :)


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    dotsChaotic Daysdots
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    Darkened thoughts,
    emotionally devoid.
    Prying eyes,
    paranoid.

    Lonely pulse,
    regulary erratic.
    This life,
    nonclimatic.

    Seeking answers,
    falsely lored.
    Empty heart,
    completely ignored.

    Loss of lives,
    Pointlessly cry.
    Sit in wonder,
    why people die.

    Lone crusader,
    In search of answers.
    Of the world,
    consumed in cancers.

    Endless run,
    completely exausting.
    The price on life,
    Obsuredly costing.

    Look to the sky,
    see a new day.
    Look to the deities,
    question your way.

    Stuck in confusion,
    cant figure this out.
    Mind in choas,
    constant doubt.

    Laying down your head,
    closing your eyes.
    Goodnight for now,
    your heart sighs.




    Submitted on 2009-07-02 08:51:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      wow ...
    nice work again !!

    Your rhythm is cool ..
    there is one line which rang this to me ..

    "Lone Crusader, In search of answers"

    "lone crusader, darth vader :P"

    AbsolutelyLost
    | Posted on 2009-07-18 00:00:00 | by AbsolutelyLost | [ Reply to This ]


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