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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    16/girly/sunshine state
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 164/193/184
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 69
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    am i just your background?
    do you change me when you don't feel it?
    and am i just your key?
    that you sometimes forget?

    am i just your doormat?
    do i always have to say yes?
    am i your walk-way?
    un-known like the rest?

    am i your heart beat?
    do i beat faster when i arrive?
    or am i your diary?
    am i filled mostly with lies?

    am i your bank?
    do you take money out of me?
    or am i your wallet?
    forgotten to let be.

    am i your love?
    do you say i shine?
    am i yours?
    or will you leave me behind?





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      This is a great poem. Bringing together the feelings of confusion and hurt. It makes the reader want to find out what's going on in this persons life and maybe even help make it better. I loved the choices of words and I believe that everyone should know the answers to these questions, for their own situations, and never have to wonder this again. Thank you for sharing this Rachi, it really made a difference to me. I hope to read more of your work. Keep it up!

    ~Dreamer
    | Posted on 2009-07-02 00:00:00 | by Dreamer5009 | [ Reply to This ]


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