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    dots Submission Name: Her Violent Loverdots
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    Author: 3L3m3ntal
    ASL Info:    18/M/Arizona
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 2/5/7
    Words: 406
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Angry
    Total Views: 74
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2794



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    dotsHer Violent Loverdots
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    Based on the original poem Rape is his Game by Katie Garrison


    [Verse 1]
    Hey, I really love you.
    You’re my sunshine; my light.
    You break the clouds,
    Of course, you are my silver lining.
    This was coming for a while;
    Bacardi somehow became my style.
    I love you, girl.
    I want you more than the world.


    [Chorus]
    Hey, I really love you,
    Hey, I really need you.
    Tell those lies to someone else,
    Because I'm done listening.
    Hey, Just let me be...
    Let me be your Violent lover.


    [Verse 2]
    He used to be gleaming bright
    Like a little spot of smiles
    Within all this suffering.
    Used to be the thing I could say
    I was looking forward to
    At the end of the day.
    Then that all had to change.
    It wasn’t at the middle light;
    Instead, in the middle night.
    Surprises fell when the window broke
    The mumbled greeting became a choke.


    [Chorus]


    [Breakdown]
    Hands, flying, bottles gleaming.
    One last whisper of a clean breath,
    As the smell of alcohol prevails.
    He says he loves her.
    He says he needs her.
    The words are stopped in her throat.
    What does he mean?
    Is this what is seems?
    Why do his hands move their way there?


    [Guitar Solo]


    [Chorus]


    [Verse 3]
    Screams, muffled, in the doorway.
    His body over hers, heavy and hot
    She whispers to him, ‘Please stop.’
    The desire is too great.
    The motions of the night begin to fly
    Adrenaline pumps in his veins
    And fear slides through hers.
    One hand reaches desperately out
    Into the open space, as tonight,
    She was fucking violated.


    [Chorus]

    [Verse 4]
    He can’t stand the pleasure;
    It builds up so fast, she’s just the best.
    He mumbles her name
    While she cries in shame,
    The promises were all a game.
    There’s so much pain.
    When he’s done with what he came for,
    He rolls towards the floor,
    He Zips his pants,
    Then kissed her forehead and whispered...


    [x2]
    Hey, I really love you,
    Hey, I really need you,
    We'll have fun again another day.


    ‘Hey, I really love you.
    Let’s do this again.’
    And as he leaves from the broken glass,
    She sighs and pants.
    ‘Hey… I really hate you.
    Thanks for this.’


    [Outro Solo]


    [End.]





    Submitted on 2009-07-02 12:31:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Uhm...wow.



    That's...brilliantly dark...and I feel....oh, man. That's just evil.


    My lack of words should say something...I'm usually a really wordy person. *shakes her head* Wow, just...*shudders*
    | Posted on 2009-07-20 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]



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