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Submission Name: Breathtaking dots

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Author:	Lilyan
ASL Info:	1 Elite Years
Elite Ratio:	2.56 - 42/38/26
Words:	24

Class/Type:	Poetry/
Total Views:	45
Average Vote:	5.0000
Bytes:	223

Description:

Breathtaking dots

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Tender.. warm sand
gleaming..cold water
Soft choppiness.
Deep, yet strong matter.

Majestic alpenglow
small gentle blush
untouched fresh air
Gossamery.. lush.

Submitted on 2009-07-02 14:40:07 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Very nice description from you. Very soothing and a relaxing read.

Frank.
| Posted on 2009-07-03 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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