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    dots Submission Name: Wreckage dots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       All my writing is muck. And so this is a muck out.

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    dotsWreckage dots

    A violent storm erupts
    and leaves aftermath for those few that have remained

    with all the empty houses, windows, wheels and roofing material

    we might find some kind of comfort here
    less reason to be afraid now than before

    when we didn't know what was coming
    or what would hit or what would happen

    muck and rubble make hills of resources
    and we may be productive

    there are boards leaning against the horizon as I stand here with my heels on the line

    perfect shadows casting depth into a perspective that could have gone unnoticed
    had I simply

    Submitted on 2009-07-02 17:37:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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