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    dots Submission Name: In Lghtneningdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 308
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dots In Lghtneningdots
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    traquiltized between these walls
    staring out the windows in each
    on one side

    the horizon
    and my tiptoe hands dancing across casting shadows, that independantly walk and sit where they want to
    (and myself, watching and FEELING so much envy over this hill and that one)

    Someone painted a lawn chair here, two actually and I sit in one and I watch this place and I see things going on and on and on

    there is a rocking horse,
    what does that mean?
    Only that I want I want I want

    A kite flying over the roof of a house where I grew up in
    getting tangled in an overgrown tree
    (It has been cut down, to signify the change of circumstance through time.)

    I do not know what I see but I SEE
    do you get it?

    I was a cashier today among other things, (and maybe this is more personal than I would like
    the metaphors may get lost in the character
    but I hope these things, occuring naturally would stand on their own
    and for you that would critisize this
    be patient)
    and I saw a windchime that declared,
    "I am the kite from your dream, exactly down to the detail, the sigul of a butterly in the middle of a diamond, the shade of pink or red or crimson king, or would that be cadmium king?"
    It was struck by lightening in the dream
    and makes sense here now in a way that can't be real

    "I do not believe in magic." says Sir
    And I believe that.

    I believe that too.
    That it tapers off, this little insight into myself.
    And I am fully awake.
    And a little pissed.
    I do not have time to think about it.




    Submitted on 2009-07-02 17:52:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I read your structuralism poem and as I found it interesting, I decided to read In Lightening. I like your approach to the "What's it all about" look at life. I've got no suggestions on your work. It is excellent. Your imagery puts me where you paint the picture with words. it was a pleasurable trip.
    | Posted on 2009-07-22 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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