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    dots Submission Name: Noone Knows The Enddots
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    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    19/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 451/419/172
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1130
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    dotsNoone Knows The Enddots
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    The waterfall is always just ahead,
    Right around the bend,
    Follow the flow,
    And die at the end.

    No one ever tells the whole story,
    Little truth, little lie,
    Just exagerate,
    But we all say goodbye.

    All ghouls lay buried in the earth,
    Dirt between lungs and skin,
    We are all dead,
    We're all ghouls within.

    I've waited for you to raise your voice,
    I've waited all my life.
    But, you just sit there.
    Just sit there.





    Submitted on 2009-07-03 00:16:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "And die at the end"

    I loved that line. It actually surprised me. It's an ok poem but the rhyming could have been better.

    What's this I'm hearing? Are you married and will give birth soon? How old are you now?
    | Posted on 2009-07-04 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      there.
    i knew my sister has perfect rythme.
    we all do.im just glad you showed it.
    this poem is amazing.
    and i loved it.
    mom says you feel envious towards me
    but idk why?
    you are going to be having a child.
    and you are with the one you love.
    i think you are doing an amazing job at preparing to be a mother.
    and you make an amazing wife.
    so really im envious of you.
    im still a child myself and not taken serious.
    but carebear, we always have eachother.
    love:your poprox
    | Posted on 2009-07-03 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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