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    dots Submission Name: Your Flowersdots
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    Author: silverpen
    ASL Info:    16/F/Right Behind You
    Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 16/34/31
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 38
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 995



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    dotsYour Flowersdots
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    Hand over the Roses-
    Hand them to those who don’t care.
    Toss up a lotus-
    High enough so that we will stare.
    All that the world understands is land
    Property values and gritty sand.
    Let your flowers tear a rift
    Whether or not they believe you can.
    We are the war.
    The soldiers that fight it
    And the politicians that start it.
    Touch a daisy to your nose
    And make us jealous.
    We are the strength.
    The stems and leaves that bind
    Together the veins of your mind.
    Touch your fingers.
    Do you feel the tingle of nerves
    Being brushed oh so slightly?
    Pluck some clover, lightly.
    You can end the fighting.
    We are the inner destruction
    That will bring you to your knees.
    Can you breathe
    As we suffocate you?
    We are nothing
    But weeds and vines
    Among the flower field
    Of many blooms,
    Trying to survive.




    Submitted on 2009-07-03 16:09:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can't understand it fully. I have no words to give you, it's too good to say anything of. For the first time, I'm speachless from a poem.
    | Posted on 2009-07-03 00:00:00 | by Scaredheart | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was written well and with skill, the problem that I have is connecting with your premise. How are the flowers connected to societies problems or even deeper how are you connecting the flowers to societies problems. I guess I am having trouble connecting the dots.

    Thanks,

    Spin
    | Posted on 2009-07-03 00:00:00 | by Spin | [ Reply to This ]


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