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    dots Submission Name: The Eggdots
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    Author: Spin
    Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 72/101/84
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Eggdots
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    Thin porcelain shell
    of jewelers precision
    holds the secrets
    of beginning life
    small universe lies
    within clear skies
    suspended in eternal time
    lets look for a moment
    at this delicate dish
    taken for granted
    from everyone's fridge.
    please marvel the vision
    Gods first decision
    the incredible
    edible
    egg




    Submitted on 2009-07-03 17:36:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "Gods first decision
    the incredible
    edible
    egg"


    This made me smile.
    | Posted on 2009-07-04 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Apart from the apostrophe's missing in words here and there, this was definitely an edible poem! I loved how it expanded the wholesomeness of an egg. I imagined an egg's "life" reversing. From the plate back to the chicken pen, where it actually hatches.
    I think with-in is one word: within.
    Refreshing
    | Posted on 2009-07-03 00:00:00 | by JenFlynn | [ Reply to This ]


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