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These Small Gifts


Author: Cloacina
ASL Info:    25/F/KY
Elite Ratio:    5.24 - 20 /53 /54
Words: 36
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Another cinquain. I am confused by them now because apparently cinquain can mean diff. things, and then there are diff. forms of cinquains, and I haven't straightened it all out. But this one is a mirror cinquain and the point is to keep each stanza 5 lines in these syllables- first stanza is 2/4/6/8/2, and second one is 2/8/6/4/2. In the first one, I did try to mirror the first line with the last line in the stanza, but this was not true for the last stanza.


These Small Gifts



Open hands
offered to you
willing, but barren bowls
want to be filled, want to feed
empty palms.

Women
from the hills aren't mountains, what use
for giants, small hands can't
fill his hollow
spaces.




Submitted on 2009-07-03 17:48:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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