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    dots Submission Name: Killing Jokedots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsKilling Jokedots

    Killing Joke

    And so it seems
    Love in its absence has come again to taunt
    Laughing at the vacant dream
    It has so cunningly wrought

    Its life a threadbare of promise
    Built upon such loneliness
    Has delivered to these nights
    Yet again in its toss and turning sleepless

    Empty of love of kisses spent
    The void embrace
    Teases easily with its covenant
    And fervent, wills the wish to be

    Its very own

    Liar of touch
    Untruth of flesh and blood
    Once more of love
    Within its emptiness proclaims

    Burns for its own humour
    Such an inconsequential thing as life
    Tossed like a scrap upon its fire
    To appease its god like countenance

    With no other demeanour other than torture
    Shackles onto these cruelties
    Its chain of fate

    Merely to dig in its barb-ed spike
    And rob peace to tumult
    Defies even itself
    For the sake of a killing joke

    So sadness it can feed upon
    And think worthy still is its cause
    Even under torment
    Love finds a face to haunt

    It will, of your heart remain regardless
    Pretend to eternal fulfillment
    But leave you as barren
    As my empty arms

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