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    dots Submission Name: Donít Walk dots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsDonít Walk dots
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    Donít Walk


    Its is always on the other side
    Head between the traffic
    Where you catch the glimpses
    Other side where pavement has the greener edges

    Never step on
    Or tread between the cracks

    Not that the harsh air doesnít push
    Soft iron nail pressed with a thumb
    Till the outer layer on a cardboard tack
    Yields with its paper ripped
    Dumb

    The hollow surfaces eat from within
    Naked satisfaction slithers away
    To its masked grimace
    Hidden inside the little red flash man

    Donít walk

    Never step on the cracks
    Or tread between

    There is no such thing as mercy

    Crossing is illusory
    No other side this side as far away as it can be
    Its touch a blank advert
    A myths depravity
    Calling from its chained
    Erosion of blood

    No memory

    No memory of the skin thick nail
    Driven into those gagging throats
    But like passers-by
    There it chokes
    Now never seen on the other side
    The other side
    Where lives rescind their isolation
    Without undamaged conscience


    Head between the traffic

    Never tread on the cracks
    Or step between

    Donít walk






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