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    dots Submission Name: Moon In Auburndots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 316
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    Moon In Auburn

    As the stars were heaped upon a mantles Shangri-La
    The miniature toy town beneath its cape
    Quiet hung in yellow golden windows lit
    So silent in the dales and woods blanket
    The dog fox cry echoed from the moon
    Crisp and cloudless chill less coldness
    With the twin of the moon fluxed silver blue
    In the tiny handmaidens mirror of reflection
    Natures dark slept beneath the shadows of her hand

    And she crept in dreams
    Within the tip toe of cats
    Rendered the night through amber eyes
    Glistening on the turns of lovers kisses
    For all the endless that she misses
    Arched above an eternal sky
    She is drawn to the moss of rocks
    And clings in branches hung with lichen
    To the feathered damp of leaves
    Which catch her spark

    Just a whisper footfalls breezes shifter
    In the country lanes of ancient mazes
    By stone wall and rabbits foot
    Close upon the dandelions head
    With all the disguised colours leaping on unseen acoustics
    Were hidden amongst rivulet beds
    Catching the silver blue
    The dog fox cry echoed from the moon
    And swung out the flax upon the stars

    Fingers traced their destiny within those pinpoint suns
    A pattern constellation traits of has; she was born
    The atonement of steady reckoning he had
    Cut in trough on the ploughed earth
    Where all the seeds of tomorrow had been scattered
    With all their promises of a seasons ripening
    Old songs sung of proud man “John Barleycorn”
    And the distillation of his bone and marrow

    And while the stars piled high on their Shangri-La
    Recounted the lost tales of lovers in forgotten times
    All the memories fell in auburn locks
    And swept upon the Luna light shores
    The twin she fluxed in silver blue
    And the dog fox cry echoed from the moon

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