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    dots Submission Name: Traitors Forgedots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsTraitors Forgedots

    Traitors Forge

    The soft and unwilling sigh
    Forges inside empty fires
    Too long these hours beat anvils
    In my treacherous heart

    Too many unrequited hours
    Pass inside each beat
    And treacherous now
    Hacks at each

    And so the traitor
    I used to call my heart
    Just does not
    But meanders homeless
    And will not rest within my ribs
    But bend the wrought cage-ed
    It to long has lived
    With out you

    Why does everything seem so void
    When each movement
    Seems hung on a lament of time
    Passing between two dimensions
    Without the slightest intoxication

    It is a deadness longing
    To escape itself from my life

    Too many unrequited hours
    Pass inside each beat
    And treacherous now
    Hacks at each

    Deepening sadness plucks at strings
    With such a foreign language
    In a haunting melody
    Its rhythm a slow science of unshed tears
    Betrays my voice
    With its inanimate cry

    And distraction to
    Lingers on nothing
    This vacant stare
    Cannot hinge upon anything
    Such is the treachery
    Of uselessness
    The soft and unwilling sigh
    Forgets inside empty fires
    Too long these days beat anvils
    In the traitorous designs of my heart

    A blacksmith hammers
    The heated iron
    But lays dead in passion
    And cannot sit
    Not even for a minute
    On all the obsession
    That melts away
    In the arc-light of my finger tip

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