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    dots Submission Name: The Unending Beginingdots
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    Author: AbsolutelyLost
    ASL Info:    27/M/India
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 54/41/33
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    dotsThe Unending Beginingdots
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    Me:
    "Sometimes you run out of words, then you make an effort in order to come up with something close.
    From rumbling thoughts to peerless joy,
    From immense despair to a perfect bliss,
    From dusk to dawn, is what's the story associated with magnetic eyes and a flawless smile.
    An admirer of the magical smile asks for a portrait of relentless joy to embark on a friendship for angelical times."

    Her:
    "Pristine words and thoughts divine,
    Grateful for the complimenting line,
    But sorry, You are no friend of mine."

    Me:
    "Arbit musings were not distant flirtations.
    In replying to these lines of mine,
    have you not taken a step out of the line?
    So lets not cross the line,
    but still we could just walk the line.
    Friendship follows in due course of time !! "

    ...

    Chemistry of history,
    seems like anarchy,
    in the hope of not being an irony !




    Submitted on 2009-07-04 06:31:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Nice. :)

    What a satisfying read. It was clever, romeo and julietish,

    I like the format, from him to her.
    I like the banter back and forth, there is actually much to read in between lines.

    angelical times

    I wonder what you meant by this or had in mind when you wrote it?

    Your style begs consideration.
    I like that.


    Thanks for sharing.
    Jazmine
    | Posted on 2011-09-23 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Chemistry of history,
    seems like anarchy,
    in the hope of not being an irony !

    AMAZING yet again. At first I wasn't sure where you were going with this and was like huh? But I got it. I love how you compare and contrast a lot of things in this post

    From rumbling thoughts to peerless joy,
    From immense despair to a perfect bliss,
    From dusk to dawn,

    I feel it gives the reader more of an understanding and ability to paint a picture in their mind. Great post here

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2009-07-05 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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