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The Art of Madness


Author: LucyDiamond
ASL Info:    17/F/Sky
Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 365 /575 /251
Words: 169
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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this poem appears in Crosscurrents.


The Art of Madness



I know exactly
what I want to do.
I want
to finger paint on you.

I want to try out
every startling,

brilliant hue.

Perhaps I will start with
a piercing jolt of yellow
that would splay your neurons
into shock—
I could rewire you to be
electricity.

Then
comes the flash of red
that would kick your head
into a mess—
oh just you wait
for the frantic frenzy
I can project!

And then, there is blue—
manic splash to match
your coursing, pulsing veins—

Oh,

you.

Can I retain
the flash flood of color
these ardent hands contain?

Or do my hands cover
and contaminate—

painkiller
poison
paint?

This is what I do.
Who are you this time, Mister,

who?

I’ve got

to get
my hands
on you.





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  i feel a jackson pollock emotion in this....

painting with splashes...and you take the metaphor all the way through the poem in such "colorful" fashion to describe your passion...

and this makes me wonder...how are there no comments on such a piece?

i'm so surprised...you really can turn a phrase and your words really show!

jacob
| Posted on 2011-04-22 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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