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    dots Submission Name: The Art of Madnessdots
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    Author: LucyDiamond
    ASL Info:    17/F/Sky
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 365/575/251
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 509
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1104



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       this poem appears in Crosscurrents.


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    dotsThe Art of Madnessdots
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    I know exactly
    what I want to do.
    I want
    to finger paint on you.

    I want to try out
    every startling,

    brilliant hue.

    Perhaps I will start with
    a piercing jolt of yellow
    that would splay your neurons
    into shock—
    I could rewire you to be
    electricity.

    Then
    comes the flash of red
    that would kick your head
    into a mess—
    oh just you wait
    for the frantic frenzy
    I can project!

    And then, there is blue—
    manic splash to match
    your coursing, pulsing veins—

    Oh,

    you.

    Can I retain
    the flash flood of color
    these ardent hands contain?

    Or do my hands cover
    and contaminate—

    painkiller
    poison
    paint?

    This is what I do.
    Who are you this time, Mister,

    who?

    I’ve got

    to get
    my hands
    on you.





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    ||| Comments |||
      i feel a jackson pollock emotion in this....

    painting with splashes...and you take the metaphor all the way through the poem in such "colorful" fashion to describe your passion...

    and this makes me wonder...how are there no comments on such a piece?

    i'm so surprised...you really can turn a phrase and your words really show!

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-04-22 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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