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ETCH-A-SKETCH WILL GIVE MANY YEARS OF


Author: LucyDiamond
ASL Info:    17/F/Sky
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Words: 104
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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ETCH-A-SKETCH WILL GIVE MANY YEARS OF ENJOYMENT
IF USED WITH REASONABLE CARE

Written a few months ago.



ETCH-A-SKETCH WILL GIVE MANY YEARS OF



MAGIC Etch-A-Sketch SCREEN is like
a mirror in what it means.
I can sketch as many etches as I please
into the gray, sandy screen—tiny flecks
of Etch-A-Sketch flesh
part like a little Red Sea. I weave
the white knobs—HORIZONTAL DIAL,
VERTICAL DIAL—up and down,
up and down. And when my left and right
move syncopated and smooth,
new lines are drawn
like a road on a map
or a wrinkle on a face. But still,
so much gray space—

nevermind, I’m finished.
“SHAKE GENTLY TO ERASE.”





Submitted on 2009-07-04 16:45:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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