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    dots Submission Name: A Letter To Goddots
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    Author: Megsrus aka Meg
    ASL Info:    15/f/USA
    Elite Ratio:    1.32 - 9/63/39
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsA Letter To Goddots
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    Dear God there are some issues
    Which I'd like to bring to light
    It seems that all the human race
    Is filled with hate and fight
    People are judged by appearance
    Religion and were they live
    Always finding a reason to war
    They've forgotten how to forgive
    Dear God if you can hear me
    Please listen to my plea
    All your forests are being cut down
    Oil is spilling in your sea
    Animals are being hunted
    Until they are no more
    People are dumping all their trash
    Upon your land and shore
    Dear God I don't know what to do
    I'm just one girl after all
    I can't change the entire world
    Not when the odds against me are so tall
    But someone must do something
    Like this we cannot stay
    There must be some method
    Some secret, hidden way
    Dear God I think I have an idea
    If we all work as one
    Then we can turn off this terrible path
    And return to our innocent fun
    Well Lord I really have to go
    There is a lot of people who I have to tell
    About this plan you've helped to make
    Your Daughter, Ariel




    Submitted on 2009-07-04 19:28:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      don't listen to Paradox.
    God hasn't forsaken us.
    he exist and he protects us.
    i know praying to God helps. and he always listens.but sometimes we don't get an answer to problems. i choose to think that God has a reason for those times.
    rachel:)
    btw love your name..
    | Posted on 2009-07-05 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]
      :)

    I like the innocence of this piece. Though I cannot relate to the subject matter. I feel that god, if he ever existed, has forsaken us long ago...
    | Posted on 2009-07-04 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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