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    dots Submission Name: Ancient Lightsdots

    Author: Spin
    Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 72/101/84
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAncient Lightsdots

    As I look to the sky
    ancient lights pierce eternal space
    each pulse, every beam
    takes 10,000 years to shine upon me.
    Tiny fossils set in spaces black back drop
    .........Only I pray they don't stop shining.
    That long ago all of the stars disappeared
    and we just haven't received the darkness
    in the stead of the 10,000 years.

    Submitted on 2009-07-05 15:02:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      again..Paradox has a point but i love it.
    you are great.
    it is well-written and has a great aspect.
    so i like it. and i love your aspect behind it.
    | Posted on 2009-07-05 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]
      Hm... I like the thought behind this. The technical aspect of the poem could be improved. Made me think though about universal fears.
    | Posted on 2009-07-05 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]

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