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    dots Submission Name: Memoriesdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Nostalgia
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsMemoriesdots
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    Back at the place I once called home
    Memories of what use to be
    flood my mind like New Orleans did when the levies broke!

    Bogged down with sadness and regret.
    Not sure how to lift myself up from here.
    This weight is too much,
    the pressure exceeds my motivations to pick myself up.

    So I lye here at this bottomless pit,
    stuck deep within, what am I to do now?
    Where do I go from here?

    How is it up is my only direction to go yet this pit is getting deeper and deeper as each moment passes?

    HELP...
    For I am

    Lost
    Alone
    Scared
    Tired

    Longing for love and support I've never felt
    Searching for a helping hand...
    That I never had
    But always wanted...




    Submitted on 2009-07-05 16:18:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Just like always, you mastered raw emotion in this one. Exspressing the true feelings of a person lost and neglected, never given the proper support. Your words, echoing, the pain, of a child once forgotten. Words, of a child, pained to the heart, from wounds that should have never been born.
    | Posted on 2009-07-25 00:00:00 | by grimmreaper | [ Reply to This ]
       I know all of these feelings. Know that there is acceptance and love out there. And they are out there for you! You have come past so much, it does shape who we are without them we would be different, but...
    would we be better?
    What you have gone through and come past NO child should ever have had to do. The reality is some end up where you were. And there is nothing they can do to change it.
    Do not think you are alone. I am here your mom it seems is trying as is your dad.
    Go from there and use it as a spring to propel you higher to better because you deserve nothing else.
    | Posted on 2009-07-05 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]


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