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Is It Because


Author: trynfinity
ASL Info:    38/f/California
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Words: 148
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I can't help but wonder
if it's because my heart believed.


Is It Because




I know I never told you
never said the words out-loud.
Afraid that if I said it
my words would have no sound.

To say that I believed
I was meant to be right here at your side.
That we really had that love
only few are lucky enough to find.

To say out-loud that I believed
I was permanent in your heart.
I could not ever be replaced
would leave me alone here in the dark.

But still my heart believed
it believed in all I've said.-
Whether said openly out-loud
it was always there echoing in my head.

Now here we sit
unsure of where we stand.
Of where we'll go from here
if it's together hand in hand.

I can't help but wonder
if it's because my heart believed.
Because I believed forever
and now forever my heart deceived.




Submitted on 2009-07-05 20:58:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  the end is really powerful.
i enjoyed reading it.
plus it sounded incredible.
i loved it.
rachel:)
| Posted on 2009-07-07 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]
  I like the flow here. you have a talent to always say what your heart is feeling you pose several good questions about what your heart felt and then what you felt its a great post

Jackz
| Posted on 2009-07-06 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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