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    dots Submission Name: Stolendots
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    Author: MysterydarkPoet
    ASL Info:    18/f/Aust
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 155/259/141
    Words: 233
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 111
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1565



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    dotsStolendots
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    I wander,
    A dark and lonely road
    Somewhere in my mind
    where the rains pouring into the gutters,
    the street lamps are flickering,
    & strangers lurk in shadows

    But i'm fearless in my step,
    I see it all
    But i feel nothing
    Slowly my shoes are sinking me
    into the depths of my insanity

    Cause if this cold hard rain
    can't wash away the pain
    then i'm afraid nothing will
    every emotion is a wasted emotion
    when the only one
    that ever mattered
    was stolen.

    I lay,
    in darkness and loneliness
    Somewhere in my mind,
    where the cold wind sings to me,
    these layers of blankets can't keep me warm,
    and every movement feels like a bed of knives

    But i'm dazed in my daydream,
    i see nothing
    but i feel it all,
    slowly the darkness is blinding me
    deserting me with my insanity

    Cause if the winds soft lullabies
    can't help me sleep at night
    then i'm afraid nothing will
    an empty coffin
    never rested a soul
    so take all you want from me
    cause the only thing i ever treasured
    was stolen.

    So if my shoes continue to sink me,
    and the darkness does nothing but blind me
    then i don't think i should care at all
    cause i'd rather not see, i'd rather not be
    when the only thing i ever loved,
    was stolen.




    Submitted on 2009-07-06 01:35:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nicely written really great the words paint a picture, I like the style in which you wrote. I really found it to be nothing more then spectacular. Keep it up, really because if you ceased to spread your gift of writing towards others, they would be the ones to suffer.

    Cause if this cold hard rain
    can't wash away the pain
    then I'm afraid nothing will
    every emotion is a wasted emotion
    when the only one
    that ever mattered
    was stolen.

    I love this part most, your words really made me think about a lot of things, this piece was so interesting and unique I can't seem to think of the right words to describe it so I'll leave it at that.

    Keep it up!
    -Princess of Ra
    | Posted on 2009-08-09 00:00:00 | by Princess of Ra | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW! Definitly a different but very interesting way of saying that the heart won't be swayed by the world when in pain. I like the way you reached varying levels of an unhealed heart. Well written.
    | Posted on 2009-07-06 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]
      What's stolen is a gem,
    If found is a ground,
    For finding dreams,
    In a calm and sweet sleep.

    But aah the wish is desperate,
    The want temperate.
    There is a crack in the window,
    From where the ray is mellow.

    If all I were to be drowned,
    With when i was once crowned,
    I would be just a pauper,
    A gem unknown to Laughter.

    Think beyond the black,
    Of a tiny rack,
    The library of life,
    Is but beyond this file.

    Regards,
    AbsolutelyLost
    | Posted on 2009-07-06 00:00:00 | by AbsolutelyLost | [ Reply to This ]
       I was the first to read this, that makes me feel special. LOL

    You paint such pictures with your poetry. You imagism is always so capturing: "where the rains pouring into the gutters,the street lamps are flickering". It's so pristene and alive.

    Although I'm beginning to think I've got the halo effect on you. Everything you write is so perfect, but different, as always.

    I feel like I'm bothering if I write more so....
    | Posted on 2009-07-06 00:00:00 | by MidnightSun89 | [ Reply to This ]


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