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    dots Submission Name: Demon World Prologuedots
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    Author: RoxasUzumaki
    ASL Info:    15/M/Philadelphia PA
    Elite Ratio:    1.27 - 2/2/3
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
    Total Views: 83
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 497



    Description:
       would like to thank Kio for revising it for me :)


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    dotsDemon World Prologuedots
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    The year is 2486 and the world is in chaos. Demonic creatures have run amuck with werewolves, vampires, Demons themselves and other creatures of the underworld and the night roam the streets. On the opposing side are all those mystical creatures and people that just wish to be free from the hold of their oppressors. In the end, two will fight to decide the fate of this wonderful, atmospheric world that once belonged to the humans alone. The world will end or flourish, it is yet to be decided.




    Submitted on 2009-07-06 05:04:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's a good idea. You might want to reword some of it. For example, instead of saying "Demonic creatures have run amuck with werewolves, vampires, Demons themselves and other creatures of the underworld and the night roam the streets." You might want to say, "Demonic creatures have inhabited the earth and are slowly taking over the night. Werewolves, vampires, demons of all kinds, and evil spirits have formed a strong front against humans and those mystical creatures who have decided to fight for the humans." If you plan on doing anything with it, you'll need to elaborate some. The ending sentence is a bit of an odd one. It needs to have a bit more... direness, if you will. It's good though. I like it.
    | Posted on 2009-07-07 00:00:00 | by NodokaHayashi | [ Reply to This ]
      This Concept is very good. with a little more detail it would be a great Graphoc novel, hell even a movie, give it a little more work. have you considered submitting ideads to Deutsch Press Comics?
    | Posted on 2009-07-06 00:00:00 | by Monsun | [ Reply to This ]



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