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    dots Submission Name: waiting for you.dots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    21/ F/ Heaven
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 232/369/355
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 670
    Average Vote:    3.5000
    Bytes: 667



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    dotswaiting for you.dots
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    i'm always nervous.
    you are my one true love.
    i pace around the room.
    i'm always too much.

    i click from page to page.
    waiting for you to arrive.
    it says you're on.
    but i think it's a lie.

    i type at random poetry.
    my heart falls down.
    my ears are wide open.
    listening for that sound.

    the one where it beeps.
    says i have a reply.
    my mind plays tricks on me.
    i feel like im going to cry.

    i sit here alone.
    i have no clue what to do.
    so i just sit here.
    waiting on you.





    Submitted on 2009-07-06 15:04:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I hate waiting for a response to an email, Even more so I go nuts waiting for a response to a text message or voicemail. Literally nuts.

    Nice job relaying that here,
    | Posted on 2009-07-07 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it, I like the anticipation of waiting for
    that one person. I feel you.
    But your Gramer could use a little work.
    | Posted on 2009-07-07 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      The beat is a bit awkward at points, however I like the overall impression it gives. It does an excellent job conveying emotion. Anyone who has ever waited for a reply will understand where you are coming from.

    Keep on writing!

    ~Kirst
    | Posted on 2009-07-06 00:00:00 | by Snarkypoet | [ Reply to This ]


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