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Lie to Me

Author: SilentDreams42
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Words: 146
Class/Type: Poetry /Angry
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I hate hypocrites and people that lie to me.
It may not seem like the truth will surface... but it will.

Id rather be hurt and hear the truth from you than be lied to and find out later.. from someone else.

Dont ever lie to me. I'm not going to tolerate it from anyone any longer.

I'm done with people that lie to me.

[needs work]

Lie to Me

What you see is not reality
So lie to me
And tread through the darkness
Through the solemn shadows of the unseen
Tread through the thick oasis of lies

Because regardless, the vultures will feed
For they sense the fear in your heart

They know exactly what you need
As your world begins to part

They sense the loneliness in your soul
Trying to find a gap, a hole

They sense how naïve you really are
Like the viscous stench of tar

Therefore, tread
Tread through the thick oasis of lies
Through the solemn shadows of the unseen
Tread through the darkness and lie to me

Lie to me as I continue to tread
As I get sucked in like quicksand
Only left for dead

Lie to me
Because the truth does not lie within existence

Submitted on 2009-07-06 17:49:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The words are used exceptionally well. The aura around the poem is brawny, and sticks well. This is something I believe many could relate to. And it depicts the agony that lies bring on; or that's what I got out from this. I enjoyed it, it was good.
| Posted on 2009-07-08 00:00:00 | by Lincesa | [ Reply to This ]

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