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    dots Submission Name: Lie to Medots
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    Author: SilentDreams42
    Elite Ratio:    6.43 - 38/30/42
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 592
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    Description:
       I hate hypocrites and people that lie to me.
    It may not seem like the truth will surface... but it will.

    Id rather be hurt and hear the truth from you than be lied to and find out later.. from someone else.

    Dont ever lie to me. I'm not going to tolerate it from anyone any longer.

    I'm done with people that lie to me.






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    dotsLie to Medots
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    What you see is not reality
    So lie to me
    And tread through the darkness
    Through the solemn shadows of the unseen
    Tread through the thick oasis of lies

    Because regardless, the vultures will feed
    For they sense the fear in your heart

    They know exactly what you need
    As your world begins to part

    They sense the loneliness in your soul
    Trying to find a gap, a hole

    They sense how na´ve you really are
    Like the viscous stench of tar

    Therefore, tread
    Tread through the thick oasis of lies
    Through the solemn shadows of the unseen
    Tread through the darkness and lie to me

    Lie to me as I continue to tread
    As I get sucked in like quicksand
    Only left for dead

    Lie to me
    Because the truth does not lie within existence




    Submitted on 2009-07-06 17:49:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The words are used exceptionally well. The aura around the poem is brawny, and sticks well. This is something I believe many could relate to. And it depicts the agony that lies bring on; or that's what I got out from this. I enjoyed it, it was good.
    | Posted on 2009-07-08 00:00:00 | by Lincesa | [ Reply to This ]


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