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    dots Submission Name: Can You?dots
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    Author: LuluLamperouge
    Elite Ratio:    0.35 - 0/2/3
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 353
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       A poem I thought of a couple of days ago. Enjoy and tell me what you think.


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    dotsCan You?dots
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    Can you take my breath
    And make me breathless?
    Could you really take this forbidden heart
    And take that pain
    That has been locked up inside?

    I ask you that because I...oh so desire it
    I desire for someone, anyone
    To make all this pain and suffering just go away
    Make it leave forever
    Never to come back

    All I ask is for someone to love me
    Take care of me and take me away and drown me in their love
    Let me cry into their warm, soft chest
    And hold me close to comfort me
    To tell me...everything will be alright...




    Submitted on 2009-07-06 21:09:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The longing in the words are brilliant, when you read this obviously you can tell the writer feels something strong. Over all I believe this was good.
    | Posted on 2009-07-07 00:00:00 | by Lincesa | [ Reply to This ]

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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