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    dots Submission Name: Mocha Lattédots
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    Author: LadyInRed88
    ASL Info:    19/f/MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 131/180/32
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1550
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1005



    Description:
       At first this was going to be lyrics... as I wrote it I imagined it being sung to soft guitar music. However, after it was written I butchered the damn thing and put it into poetry form. Its really very simple but still holds alot of emotion. Hope ya like it.


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    dotsMocha Lattédots
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    It was just a little café,
    On the corner by the bar...
    Where I went to start each day,
    After love had broken my heart...

    I'd sit there by the window,
    All alone and watch the rain...
    Dance like 'star-crossed lovers',
    and then die upon the pane...

    I'd sit there stirring my Mocha Latte,
    Just wishing to hear his breath...
    Yes, I'd sit there in that café-
    As I had each day since he left...

    For it wasn't just his tenderness-
    Or his deep brown laughing eyes
    Nor was he just a lover-
    Who hung the stars in my sky...

    He was like my Mocha Latte,
    An addiction- bittersweet
    And oh, his love filled me with passion-
    A passion I'd come to need...

    But now since I dont have his love,
    To get me through each day...
    I'll just sit here by this window,
    And stir my mocha latté...




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      lol i kno exactly what thats like. after my last bf broke up with me, ive been spending an unusual amount of time in dunkin donuts... they have good lattes (depending on who makes them). I like to sit there in the morning, its quiet. I guess i can just relate to the desrtedness (i think i just made tht word up) of it all... In fact, since i have off from school tomorrow, thats probably where i'll end up.

    * nikkki *
    | Posted on 2005-03-03 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      ummm .. im stumped. it was so awesome. A well written well rhymed poem. Not forced, simple but not too simple. This is going to be on my faves list! good job! ~*~amber~*~
    | Posted on 2004-09-02 00:00:00 | by rocknpoetrychik | [ Reply to This ]
      i dont know much about writing lyrics as opposed to poetry.. and while this works as a beautiful poem.. i dont see why it couldnt be a song as well..? more like an accoustic Jewel you were meant for me type song..
    | Posted on 2004-07-18 00:00:00 | by girlinthephoto | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a sweet piece. I think you have some interesting ideas. I don't have anything constructive to add. I enjoyed the read.
    | Posted on 2004-07-18 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
      girl this is sooooo gooood! Again i thought u just described the setting wonderfully-i could see the cafe, the rain, and feel the loneliness mood, yet really calm and tranquil too. Excellent!

    Keep spreading the love
    Nadia*
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by AfricanPrincess | [ Reply to This ]


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