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    Author: Tessla
    ASL Info:    19/F/Raccoon City
    Elite Ratio:    0.61 - 2/3/4
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 632
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 511



    Description:
       Ok so its a bit amateur, I can write so much better, but its how I was feeling at the moment. Ugh, critique is greatly appreciated, just go easy. I already know its not a masterpiece. Lol


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    Have I ever told you
    How happy you make me?
    When your arms are around me tight
    With no intention of ever letting go.

    Have I ever told you
    How much I miss you?
    When you turn to walk away
    Your sweet scent lingering around me
    Your taste still on my lips.

    I'm telling you now,
    My life couldn't go on without you.
    You've made me strong, you've made me weak
    No one could ever possibly replace you.




    Submitted on 2009-07-07 00:58:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really truly love this poem, I find it very touching. I'm so totally favoriting this:) Beautiful, just like you.
    | Posted on 2009-11-21 00:00:00 | by smexybabe0101 | [ Reply to This ]
      Its actually for my Boyfriend in Real life, and you should know that xD
    | Posted on 2009-07-07 00:00:00 | by Tessla | [ Reply to This ]
      AWWWWWWWW

    I bet this i for your leading man ^_^
    | Posted on 2009-07-07 00:00:00 | by Luna010 | [ Reply to This ]


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