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    Author: weepingwillow
    ASL Info:    23/f/Brighton
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 38/75/35
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Personal Quotes/Serious
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    like the ocean
    i am bound by tides
    swirled in a rock
    perpetual crash, as i swill and spray satisfactorily; and still dissatisfied,
    my direction unforeseen

    mosses and tendrils.
    Water
    flung-listless, or demonstrative of unsurpassable power
    reach and bleach
    dischordant, and always indifferent,rushing in as we fear, sublimation of sense

    nothing explains me
    an expression of all colours, from dense and sinister grey, boasting depth
    to the palest turquoise,matching irises, distilling the psyche,Suggesting tranquility

    Indubitable,inimitable

    pace immeasurable,racing to fill the caverns of time,
    stalactytes
    sandholes
    entrenching the solid with devastating brine

    a prayer to the seas,i am borne of you,
    to you i belong, in awe,the best known medicine.




    Submitted on 2009-07-07 15:00:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Tide pools are cool. Thread and spool life lines ruled too short. Contorting our forms, born of stormy seas; rushing currents. Reflective in our essence; pinks and greens. Coral, seaweed, chocolate. melting, melding, meticulously. Fins to flippers to fingers; darwin.
    | Posted on 2009-07-10 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]
      I like your choice of words here. Many of my pieces utilize obscure wording as well. It is difficult writing poetry about something that has been done so many times. I think you did a very good job here.

    Yours in Christ
    Ben
    | Posted on 2009-07-07 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]


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