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    dots Submission Name: To Love a Raccoondots
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    Author: EmpathicAya
    ASL Info:    13+6/unMale/Your Mind
    Elite Ratio:    7.66 - 665/396/86
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsTo Love a Raccoondots
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    She wanted to give him a world full
    of color and paint him
    a goddess inhaling the night sky;
    breathing
    out sleep and immortality, not simply
    rolling into bed praying to wake up the next day.

    She had reassurance to give him, to walk him
    on clouds spun silver and gold;
    beauty from the tears of her heart.
    "Sure you may fall into fire but,
    You will only rise, soar higher.
    "

    Shelter, she had naught to provide but her own body,
    mind and soul stretched higher, taller,
    wider, wound around him in ways
    to make music of hail storms, wind storms and falling stars.

    All her soul she wanted to give, her universe and epicenter
    on a silver blue platter shining love, life, allegiance,
    and maybe a few laughs.

    And she beckoned to him,
    but

    he startled at the sound
    and scampered away.







    Submitted on 2009-07-07 19:43:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      those who love the night shall stay in the dark. Good write here. You did a lot with your "racoon". And I like the way the image/idea behind it morphs within and through the poem.

    Good write thanks you.
    | Posted on 2009-07-10 00:00:00 | by leftof_red | [ Reply to This ]
      Jesus, do I know what it's like to love a raccoon... thief in the night, stealing only what isn't attached to any particular beckoning hand ... leave the door unlocked, they come right in, but open it? Forget it, you're "dangerous" for them.

    Perfect. I don't know what elitists would say, lacking the full bag of scrabble adjectives everyone here carries, but I could feel and relate this to myself so well, and that's what I love in poetry... flexibility of the interpretation to fit almost any situation that might be experienced in the human spectrum, an understanding and connection, and yes, you are living up to you name :) empathic you are with your words.
    | Posted on 2009-07-10 00:00:00 | by grey_girl | [ Reply to This ]


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