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    Author: isis_lenore
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    Promises quieter than the falling ashes
    Wasted lies, covering the valleyís
    Broken beauty.

    Canít believe in anything
    Without believing in Emersonís
    Reliance.

    Gave my soul, to gain control-
    A faceless king hones a butcherís
    Blade into a point,

    Avarice gained in insurance bills
    From printed wills, not yet
    Dry.

    And yet, still, you look the other way.




    Submitted on 2009-07-07 20:04:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      MM, I say the same as Shadow (below), because I don't quite get the metaphors - bit dumb, need more of a clue - but all the same, you do know what you're talking about and the pattern of original metaphors delights me. "Falling ashes" reminds me of Mt St Helens, or maybe Pompeii.
    | Posted on 2009-09-14 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a little hard to read and understand although after going through it a couple of times I get the general drift. However, the final line leaves me to reach for a connection. There seems to be a complete jump from the broader theme that seems to revolve around Emerson's Reliance. To me, the last line means that, in an attempt to gain the affection of someone, the speaker as given himself over to the material and lost his own right way. Even though this piece is a little difficult to grasp right off, it is none the less a pleasure to find work that is intellectually engaging.
    | Posted on 2009-07-10 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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