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The Angels Cry Tonight


Author: mojymo
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The Angels Cry Tonight



Because you’ve murdered mommy
The angels cry tonight
And God will send vendettas
To tuck you in at night
And you will be too weak
To even give a fight
And I swear I will not tell
If you keep me in the light

Because you killed your best friend
The angels cry tonight
And Satan will embrace you
And claim that you've done right
But don’t listen to the Red Man
That has you in His sight
His words are merely fiction
And He’ll bring you only plight

Because you’ve taken everything
The angels cry tonight
And the world stops its spinning
And the authors start to write
And the people you once knew
Don’t think you’re very bright
And now everybody knows
That you’re nothing but a blight

And because the ending’s near
The angels cry tonight
And thanks to all your cruelty
Our souls will not be white
And the stars will always blame you
For blocking out the light
And because of you it’s over
And the angels cry tonight

END: 4:44pm
Tuesday, September 18, 2007




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  Indeed a touching piece of artistry, and a soothing read at that compared to your general style i would say. This definitely spells out a deeper thought process relevatory of a firm rooted manifestation of tainted emotion not yet fully dissected or dealt with for the pain is too rooted. I think this was a good release and a good display of laying the inner workings bare. Thanks for sharing with us.

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-Svw
| Posted on 2009-09-28 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
  This is like a lullaby a demented mom would sing to her kids. Yeah i'm not in a critique type mood so it's going to be all about thoughts n feelings (icky!!! :D) I love how you kept to the same rhyming scheme through out this piece, it makes it seem as if you put more time into this and actually paid attention to what you wrote. And this part surprised me, it didn't seem/feel repetitive at all and this is where i bow at your feet and worship you.

Plus because i love this one so much I'm faveing it :D

well this is all my dead mind can come up with to say


with love,
Nikki
| Posted on 2009-07-08 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]
  Well, this is a gripping read, nice wordage and rhyme, and I like the angels crying thing, because of the context and repeating lines coinciding, it doesn't come out as cliché at all, like it could if used in something like, your heart was broken by love and all the angels were crying, as a passing reference... I don't do "negative" but even if I did, I wouldn't have anything to say negatively towards this. It was like a mystery, too, because you didn't give much away... it could apply to a murder, a social wrong, or even in a political sense... but I don't know which, I'm guessing a personal level. That it can stretch to any, shows a good depth.

All in all, I enjoyed this, a wonderful first read on my first night back in awhile!
| Posted on 2009-07-08 00:00:00 | by grey_girl | [ Reply to This ]


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