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    dots Submission Name: The Angels Cry Tonightdots
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    Author: mojymo
    Elite Ratio:    6.43 - 50/59/41
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Angels Cry Tonightdots
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    Because youíve murdered mommy
    The angels cry tonight
    And God will send vendettas
    To tuck you in at night
    And you will be too weak
    To even give a fight
    And I swear I will not tell
    If you keep me in the light

    Because you killed your best friend
    The angels cry tonight
    And Satan will embrace you
    And claim that you've done right
    But donít listen to the Red Man
    That has you in His sight
    His words are merely fiction
    And Heíll bring you only plight

    Because youíve taken everything
    The angels cry tonight
    And the world stops its spinning
    And the authors start to write
    And the people you once knew
    Donít think youíre very bright
    And now everybody knows
    That youíre nothing but a blight

    And because the endingís near
    The angels cry tonight
    And thanks to all your cruelty
    Our souls will not be white
    And the stars will always blame you
    For blocking out the light
    And because of you itís over
    And the angels cry tonight

    END: 4:44pm
    Tuesday, September 18, 2007




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      Indeed a touching piece of artistry, and a soothing read at that compared to your general style i would say. This definitely spells out a deeper thought process relevatory of a firm rooted manifestation of tainted emotion not yet fully dissected or dealt with for the pain is too rooted. I think this was a good release and a good display of laying the inner workings bare. Thanks for sharing with us.

    :-)

    -Svw
    | Posted on 2009-09-28 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
      This is like a lullaby a demented mom would sing to her kids. Yeah i'm not in a critique type mood so it's going to be all about thoughts n feelings (icky!!! :D) I love how you kept to the same rhyming scheme through out this piece, it makes it seem as if you put more time into this and actually paid attention to what you wrote. And this part surprised me, it didn't seem/feel repetitive at all and this is where i bow at your feet and worship you.

    Plus because i love this one so much I'm faveing it :D

    well this is all my dead mind can come up with to say


    with love,
    Nikki
    | Posted on 2009-07-08 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, this is a gripping read, nice wordage and rhyme, and I like the angels crying thing, because of the context and repeating lines coinciding, it doesn't come out as clichť at all, like it could if used in something like, your heart was broken by love and all the angels were crying, as a passing reference... I don't do "negative" but even if I did, I wouldn't have anything to say negatively towards this. It was like a mystery, too, because you didn't give much away... it could apply to a murder, a social wrong, or even in a political sense... but I don't know which, I'm guessing a personal level. That it can stretch to any, shows a good depth.

    All in all, I enjoyed this, a wonderful first read on my first night back in awhile!
    | Posted on 2009-07-08 00:00:00 | by grey_girl | [ Reply to This ]


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