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Because you’ve murdered mommy The angels cry tonight And God will send vendettas To tuck you in at night And you will be too weak To even give a fight And I swear I will not tell If you keep me in the light Because you killed your best friend The angels cry tonight And Satan will embrace you And claim that you've done right But don’t listen to the Red Man That has you in His sight His words are merely fiction And He’ll bring you only plight Because you’ve taken everything The angels cry tonight And the world stops its spinning And the authors start to write And the people you once knew Don’t think you’re very bright And now everybody knows That you’re nothing but a blight And because the ending’s near The angels cry tonight And thanks to all your cruelty Our souls will not be white And the stars will always blame you For blocking out the light And because of you it’s over And the angels cry tonight END: 4:44pm Tuesday, September 18, 2007 |
Indeed a touching piece of artistry, and a soothing read at that compared to your general style i would say. This definitely spells out a deeper thought process relevatory of a firm rooted manifestation of tainted emotion not yet fully dissected or dealt with for the pain is too rooted. I think this was a good release and a good display of laying the inner workings bare. Thanks for sharing with us. :-) -Svw | Posted on 2009-09-28 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ] | This is like a lullaby a demented mom would sing to her kids. Yeah i'm not in a critique type mood so it's going to be all about thoughts n feelings (icky!!! :D) I love how you kept to the same rhyming scheme through out this piece, it makes it seem as if you put more time into this and actually paid attention to what you wrote. And this part surprised me, it didn't seem/feel repetitive at all and this is where i bow at your feet and worship you. | Plus because i love this one so much I'm faveing it :D well this is all my dead mind can come up with to say with love, Nikki | Posted on 2009-07-08 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ] | Well, this is a gripping read, nice wordage and rhyme, and I like the angels crying thing, because of the context and repeating lines coinciding, it doesn't come out as cliché at all, like it could if used in something like, your heart was broken by love and all the angels were crying, as a passing reference... I don't do "negative" but even if I did, I wouldn't have anything to say negatively towards this. It was like a mystery, too, because you didn't give much away... it could apply to a murder, a social wrong, or even in a political sense... but I don't know which, I'm guessing a personal level. That it can stretch to any, shows a good depth. | All in all, I enjoyed this, a wonderful first read on my first night back in awhile! | Posted on 2009-07-08 00:00:00 | by grey_girl | [ Reply to This ] | |