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    dots Submission Name: That's Whendots
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    Author: BestxDeceptions
    ASL Info:    22, Female, Kentucky.
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 25/66/49
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThat's Whendots
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    Why do I love
    you? I ask myself,
    and you ask from time
    to time.

    When did I know that
    you were the man
    that would forever
    hold my heart?

    Maybe it was the day
    when I realized that your
    hair matched my
    favorite tree.

    Or the time when I
    discovered the color of your
    eyes in a stone I
    stumbled upon.

    It could have been the
    locust in my stomach when
    I saw you walk so
    near.

    What was it exactly that
    made me positive that
    this man was my
    man?

    When he threw his
    head back and laughed at
    my awkwardness,
    that's when.




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      this is sweet... i like it
    | Posted on 2009-11-03 00:00:00 | by bloddyrazorgirl | [ Reply to This ]


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