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    dots Submission Name: November's Insanitiesdots

    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Wrote this one 11/15/08. Just got around to posting it.

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    dotsNovember's Insanitiesdots

    I could tell myself I'm not alone
    Although it is the truth
    Something seems so wrong

    I could tell myself I'm happy now
    Happiest I've been all year
    Something just doesn't fit

    I could tell myself I'm not filled with stress
    I've got less worries now
    But I still have to be strong

    I could tell myself I'm fine without you
    I don't cry or mope around
    But the 13th was tough, I must admit

    I could tell myself I'm now better off
    She's all the things I could think to want
    But I'm unsure what fills this hole

    I could hold grudge for this pain you left
    The hate could all come out
    But your smile is too sweet

    I could see this throb settle in for life
    How the pain all comes and goes
    It will get better, or so I'm told

    I could tell myself I will forget
    But that's hard and harsh
    These hurtful memories... I'd like to keep

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      We can lie to ourselves anyway we want to, once it's over, to make it bearable... after all, it's now OUR story, 1-sided, no alternate versions wandering around like a tongue-flapping loose end to be tied and clipped, so yeah.... Remember it the least painful way, make it a "bearable" story and move on from there.

    After all, relationships (after the break-up) are always open to re-interpretation and emotional editing. ie, oh, you don't want me to write that you were an uncaring, unfeeling [censored]-ass lay? My bad, but that is EXACTLY how I remember you, so... that's my story, I'm sticking to it. You remember yours how you want, and get far enough away to run your own version. Leave mine the hell alone.

    | Posted on 2009-07-09 00:00:00 | by grey_girl | [ Reply to This ]

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